Proof reading help

[t_jolt]

If you just could please proof read this. and suggest changes that would be awesome

warning. Im a sap. I know. This goes against a lot of dating rules. But i dont care. Ill take the chance anyway.

Thanks


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Ahem, admin edit: It seems the individual whose original work was apparently a basis for this post thought it was copyright infringement, so he took the time on Christmas to write us a very nice Cease and Desist letter. Whether it's infringement or not, we'll at least throw up a link to his page.
http://www.romanceforeveryone.com/love-letters/goodbye-for-now.html
Of course this post was made over a year ago so most likely, nobody will EVER SEE IT AGAIN. :roll:

Admin edit #2: Apparently linking back to the source of the original was not enough so we have removed the offending text as a result of these emails:
From: admin@romanceforeveryone.com
Sent: Wednesday, December 31, 2008 9:52 AM
To: Bob Hasenhundl
Cc: admin@romanceforeveryone.com
Subject: Re: Copyright violation on cosportbikeclub.org




Dear Mr. Hasenhundl,

I understand that my copyrighted content was not posted by you, but rather a user of your website. As a service provider, the Digital Millennium Copyright Act of 1998 does provide you some protections for copyrighted material posted by your users.

To better understand your rights and responsibilities under the Digital Millennium Copyright Act of 1998, please read the U.S Copyright Office's summary at: Digital Millennium Copyright Act of 1998 (http://www.copyright.gov/legislation/dmca.pdf)

The part dealing specifically with service providers is on page 11 and titled Limitation for Information Residing on Systems or Networks at the Direction of Users. The third bullet point reads "Upon receiving proper notification of claimed infringement, the provider must expeditiously take down or block access to the material".

I have previously submitted to you a DMCA copyright complaint. Please remove my copyrighted material from your website. That may be accomplished by deleting the letter from the post or deleting the post from the thread or deleting the entire thread.

Thank you for your help.

Sincerely,

Timothy Mahar
www.RomanceForEveryone.com (http://www.romanceforeveryone.com/) ----- Original Message -----
From: Bob Hasenhundl
To: admin@romanceforeveryone.com
Sent: Tuesday, December 30, 2008 12:26 PM
Subject: RE: Copyright violation on cosportbikeclub.org


Dear Sir,

Your copyrighted material was not put on our website by me or any of the other webmasters; it was posted by a registered user on a public forum that we host. If you like, we can contact the individual who posted it, and ask him to modify his post and give credit to you, but we are under no obligation to remove content on behalf of others.

Let me know if you’d like me to proceed with this.

Thanks,
Bob Hasenhundl
President & Webmaster,
Colorado Sportbike Club
www.COSportbikeClub.org (http://www.cosportbikeclub.org/forums/../)


From: admin@romanceforeveryone.com [mailto:admin@romanceforeveryone.com (admin@romanceforeveryone.com)]
Sent: Thursday, December 25, 2008 12:42 PM
To: Bob Hasenhundl
Cc: Admin@romanceforeveryone.com
Subject: Copyright violation on cosportbikeclub.org


Please remove my copyrighted material from your website within 48 hours.

1. The copyrighted work at issue is the love letter on my website at:
http://www.romanceforeveryone.com/love-letters/goodbye-for-now.html

2. My copyrighted work can be found on:
http://www.cosportbikeclub.org/forums/showpost.php?p=247416&postcount=1



3. I can be contacted at:
Timothy Mahar
PO Box 106
Vernonia, OR 97064
503-755-2937
admin@romanceforeveryone.com

4. I have a good faith belief that use of the copyrighted material described
above on the allegedly infringing web pages is not authorized by the
copyright owner, its agent, or the law.

5. I swear, under penalty of perjury, that the information in the
notification is accurate and that I am the copyright owner or am authorized
to act on behalf of the owner of an exclusive right that is allegedly
infringed.

If addition information is required, please let me know.

Thank you.

Sincerely,

Timothy Mahar
www.RomanceForEveryone.com (http://www.romanceforeveryone.com/)

[Mental]

Sap or no, I get that you dig this girl, but don't leave in the last line. In fact end it with; "So, this is goodbye. I will miss you Faire Princess"

It doesn't follow your intentions. But just cut it. Don't leave the door open. You're thinking along the lines of "If you love something, set it free.." but seriously, it doesn't work like that. What you are opening yourself to is agaonozing torutre every time she needs to bouce something off someone. So then you get towatch her stumble once diasater to the next while you feel you could save her. You will "confess" this to her another three times, while you sabatoge your own relationships secretly hoping she will come around.

She won't

Either this is a "we're done" letter or a "it's not going the way it should letter." The latter imples it can be saved and it appears from her action she has not left you this option.

So just be done with it, learn the sucky lesson and go find the next girl.

Ideally, the next girl on the other side of this trip this seems to want to take.

Find any girl from around 12 or so until they are 18 to 28 ish and they date "the bad boys." Its not the image thing, its the need to feel special.

Stay with me here. If she dates a nice guy, and he is nice to her and everyone, then she doesn't feel special. A key to this kind of misguided behavior is the laungage she use;

"Oh, you don't know him like I do."

"When we're alone he's soooo different."

But in the end a jerk is aj erk and she will waste an inordinate amount of time with this one, or maybe a few of these losers who lie and cheat on them. After they finally get tired of that crap (or finally get divorced) they will then actually focus on themselves and realize "Dammit, I am a princess and I will be treated as such."

Thats when they guy who is nice to everyone, becuase he is a genuinley nice person gets to clean up.

The tone of this sounds like she is still wrapped up in the jerk. You want there for her to wise up will not help speed this process, nor will you be the one she picks when she is done with it.

Sorry thems the breaks.

It sucks, but I personally assure you. Right now there is someone out there who would literally chop off a pinky in the style of the yakuza to be treated like you want to treat someone.

But right now, this one is a weight dragging you down. Dump the whole mess, grab a lower gear and get back up to speed.

Love and luck find you when your not looking.

[636Chick]

I think you mean "swinging from the fences" not for.
Other than that I think you did a good job a goodbye letter always sucks especially when it is because of anothers thoughtless actions or inactions. I agree with Mental (please don't tell him that he will haunt me forever) End it with the goodbye and shut the door. She sounds like someone who wants you around when she needs you and when she doesn't she texts. By leaving it open she will be back when she emotionally needs you and the cycle will began again.

You sound like a sweet guy and a sensitive one and you deserve better!!!
By the way how old are you, I have daughters that need a good home all over the age of 19, you can have your pick of three!!! LOL

[mtnairlover]

Sorry thems the breaks.

It sucks, but I personally assure you. Right now there is someone out there who would literally chop off a pinky in the style of the yakuza to be treated like you want to treat someone.

But right now, this one is a weight dragging you down. Dump the whole mess, grab a lower gear and get back up to speed.

Love and luck find you when your not looking.

Yep, gotta agree with Mental on this one. I just hope it doesn't take you as long as its taken me. Just don't ever give up on the idea...oh, and also what he said about not looking, yeah that's when it's s'posed to happen. So, take some time. Stop thinking about her. Don't think if there ever will be another and just enjoy now.

[salsashark]

I think you mean "swinging from the fences" not for.
Other than that I think you did a good job a goodbye letter always sucks especially when it is because of anothers thoughtless actions or inactions. I agree with Mental (please don't tell him that he will haunt me forever) End it with the goodbye and shut the door. She sounds like someone who wants you around when she needs you and when she doesn't she texts. By leaving it open she will be back when she emotionally needs you and the cycle will began again.


Listen to her... she speaketh the truth. I know because I did this. It took numerous times being raked over emotional coals to finally realize that all I did was pick up a broken heart put it back together just to lose it. We went rounds with this one over many years. But just like I read from your letter, guys are fixers. Give us a problem and we want to fix it. This includes relationships as well. Find the bird with the broken wing, mend it, then get upset when it flies away. I took several hits before I realized that I was done.

Best of luck! If you can figure this whole relationship thing out, publish a book and make a million.

You sound like a sweet guy and a sensitive one and you deserve better!!! By the way how old are you, I have daughters that need a good home all over the age of 19, you can have your pick of three!!! LOL

Ummm yeah... please see the point Mental made about 18 - 28'sh :lol:

[salsashark]

Oh... and if all else fails, there's always mail order brides!

:hump:

[~Kat~]

I agree with the first two responses here. I can tell by the tone of the letter that you really loved this girl, but she may not be ready for the life you are willing to offer. From the sounds of it, you are a very caring, sensitive, and attentive guy. And personally, I think you deserve a girl that will treat you like you seem to treat them. It's hard to see the other side of the road now, but as the fog of a broken heart clears, you will find someone with every good quality you found in the last girl and more. She will love you unconditionally and vis versa. Don't leave the door open to "if you decide to come back" but, instead, stick to your purpose as a goodbye letter. As I'm sure you've heard before, I see it all the time and remind myself of it everyday..."Never make someone a priority that keeps you as an option". Good luck in your ventures of the heart and keep your head up. The way I see it, you are quite the catch and one very lucky girl is bound to see that and snatch you up!

[vmax2003]

I think you mean "swinging from the fences" not for.
Other than that I think you did a good job a goodbye letter always sucks especially when it is because of anothers thoughtless actions or inactions. I agree with Mental (please don't tell him that he will haunt me forever) End it with the goodbye and shut the door. She sounds like someone who wants you around when she needs you and when she doesn't she texts. By leaving it open she will be back when she emotionally needs you and the cycle will began again.

You sound like a sweet guy and a sensitive one and you deserve better!!!
By the way how old are you, I have daughters that need a good home all over the age of 19, you can have your pick of three!!! LOL

hahahahahahaha:) are you trying to get rid of your daughters or what....lol.

[puckstr]

Oh... and if all else fails, there's always mail order brides!

:hump:


Stay away from number 3....
She just busted ass
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